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Many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages

#people #work #hours #time #leisure #activities #situation
Nowadays, the majority of employees tend to spend much
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working without
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. Many point out that long
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chance to be masters
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 their professions whereas
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ones
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argue that everything
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drawback
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. In my point of view , it opens the door to
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some medical issues among individuals.
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 the one hand , the main benefit of working numerous
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is that we are able to create more working outcomes. It is undeniable that most
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adolescents
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 ought to pay attention to
work
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 more
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 experience and
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 more achievements at
work
. Taking my brother as an example, he is
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 English tutor
therefore
 he has to increase his knowledge in order to be a professional teacher.
On the other hand
 , major working professionals prefer to arrange
work
 rather than spend to have fun
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 their interest areas.
To begin
 with, even working long hours could
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 to develop, entertainment is one oblivious effect to their
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organisms
 and workforce. When they spend
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 their hobbies, it can
be boost
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 their mood and it
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effects
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 all of their
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organisms
 positively . In conclusion, having
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weighted
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 everything mentioned up, I can come to
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 conclusion that many individuals who are employed for a long
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they
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are able to be
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professional
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 their jobs . In my point of view, it has more disadvantageous rather than advantageous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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