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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the obligation of education has gotten more and more common, schools’ and
teachers
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’ roles have become more and more important. Some people believe that
teachers
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 have to be responsible to teach
students
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 to judge correctly, while others are convinced that teaching academic subjects is the only duty of the teacher. In the essay, I am going to discuss these different viewpoints and the reasons why I agree with the former one.
To begin
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 with, children tend to spend the majority of their time in
school
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. A
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 is like a small society and a teacher can affect significantly
students
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. If the faculty ignores the
students
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’ impolite and bad behaviours, they will cause issues or even commit crimes after graduating from
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.
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, a
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 with a good reputation tends to have more rules for
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 to obey which include no cheating on exams, no fighting with others and being polite to everyone.
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, the
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 may be stickers.
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, most criminals graduated from schools where
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 neglected their spoiled behaviours.
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,
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 sometimes can compensate for the function of a broken family. Single parents have no time to educate their children and correct their values. It depends on the educational system to support and help teenagers become good civilians. Thereby, there are professionals and military education instructors working in schools and being in charge of teaching
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 to behave well. In conclusion, the faculty of the
school
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 plays an important role in
students
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’ lives and are supposed to help them to be able to judge things correctly for avoiding them becoming criminals in the future.
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