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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building then is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion.

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this
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part
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 of the world,
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 the fact that it can
be build
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 in the rural
areas
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 only as
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areas
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 do not have enough space available.
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have
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 contrasting views as it is believed by some people that
countryside
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 should be free from any construction of residential buildings. I support the former view of
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 essay which would be illustrated in the subsequent paragraph. To commence with, finding a place to construct
new
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 home has
becomes
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 a daunting task as because of
the
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 lot of hustle and bustle in the
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 to say, building a home in the countryside is the only solution where they get ample places to build a dream home.
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 new
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built
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 in the
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then
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 there would not be any place open for people
for
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 rejuvenation
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 as parks and gardens and would become more congested
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then
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 before.
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, building
homes
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rural
areas
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is
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 more favourable for dwellers of the nation. Apart from
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, the ample benefits of living in the countryside can not be underestimated. The alluring atmosphere and clean air would bring joy and upgrade the standard of living as the world is aware
about
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 the depletion of living
standard
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standards
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 in the
city
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 area.
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 lifestyle.
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i
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agree
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 building
homes
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 in
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rural
areas
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 because of its umpteen advantages. To recapitulate, because of
increasing
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 rush in the
city
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 area, construction of new
homes
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 would make them more congested,
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 according to me residing in
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he
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country side
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 would be more advantageous for the people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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