Some children spend a long time each day on their smart phones. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development

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The number of hours young
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their electronic tablets and
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increasing globally. I believe
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is because of the busy schedule of
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and the addictive nature of these
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. I
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think
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is a negative development because it makes
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withdrawn from their environment and exposes them to various inappropriate vices. There are some reasons why young people are spending more hours on smart gadgets.
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work schedule of most
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which has become busier. By
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, I mean because
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need to rest after working long and busy shifts, they give their
children
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these smart
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to keep them occupied while the
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go to sleep.
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, most night workers, who have to mind their
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during the day have adopted
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lifestyle of occupying their wards with watching tablets while the
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get some rest during the day.
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is the addictive nature of these
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. Their
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makes it difficult for
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to leave them after a
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as most of the applications and games
children
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play on them are sequential, one leading to another,
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making it difficult for
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to quit. The prolonged
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smart phones
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is a negative development because it erodes the interest of
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in building relationships with the people around them. When
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play games on their
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, they become engrossed in it
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not pay attention to anyone or anything around them.
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, when
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hold these
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in a room with other
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, there is rarely any verbal conversation made.
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, the
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of smartphones by
children
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exposes them to different activities that may be inappropriate for their age.
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, some
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have
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the things they learnt online from these
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that have led them to danger. In conclusion, more
children
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are using smart tablets for longer periods because
parents
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are busier at work and the addictive nature of the
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. I believe
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is a bad development as it makes
children
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less interested in their environment and could them to danger
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