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The use of cellphones has increased in this twenty-first century. Additionally, Cellphones can now be used for many purposes besides of making calls only. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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The usage of
cellphones
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 is currently trending.
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 with numerous
advantages
 than it
inital
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initial
 years.
This
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advantages
 and disadvantages phone poses
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this
 century. The 2 main
advantages
 of phones are
easy
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 to start up a business and
a
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means of storage.
Firstly
, a phone can now be used for buying and selling
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goods and
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services
serivces
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services
 without the need for physical interactions between the buyer and the seller.
In other words
,
businesses
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 can be conducted on a phone without leaving your bedroom.
For instance
,
david
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David
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 bought clothes from jumia on his cellphone without meeting the seller in person.
Thus
 mobile devices
helps
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 ease stress for consumers of goods.
Also
, another important view
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 phones is the ability to store images, files and important documents on a single device.
This
 means you can store images and files from previous and present years on a single gadget.
For example
, an
iphone
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iPhone
 can store up to 1 terabyte of valuable documents. The 2 main disadvantages of
cellphones
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cell phones
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 are
it
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they
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 can be used for scamming and
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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.
cellphones
 when misused would be used to commit crimes
such
 as stealing from others online with the help of a device.
Also
,
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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as
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has
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become
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 rampant in
this
 century through phones.
In other
words
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 people abuse and discriminate
black
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against black
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 humans online.
For instance
, a girl in the USA was arrested for
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cyberbullying
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calling
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by calling
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 someone a monkey on the internet. To conclude,
cellphones
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has
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 gained more popularity in recent times but it’s mixed with
it
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its
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advantages
such
 as conducting
a
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apply
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business and a means of storage
also
 with disadvantages
such
 as illegal activities and
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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