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Workers often retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working as long as they want. What is your opinion on this?

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Some argue that people should be allowed to continue beyond the
retirement
age
 while others counterargue that they should retire. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the latter view
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 and
also
 believe that any extension beyond the current
age
 of
retirement
 would invariably carry more negative effects than benefits for individuals and societies.
To begin
 with, among the many reasons for having upper
age
 limit for employment, reducing working capacity when humans
age
 is the leading reason. The physical stamina, mental clarity, and sharpness of the senses start to decline after a certain
age
. For ,instance older
workers
 would fall sick more often than younger
workers
, leading to less productivity.
Thus
, companies should employ
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younger working force, in order to be successful.
Secondly
, society bares the responsibility to create job opportunities for
school-leavers
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. The job market is already limited.
Furthermore
, If elderly
workers
 continue to occupy their positions, there won't be opportunities to recruit the younger generation. Unemployment among school leavers has created many issues
such
 as addiction to drugs,
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rise in crime.
On the other hand
, one's who support extending the
retirement
age
 based their argument on the fact that older
workers
 are wiser and more experienced compared to new recruiters who are naive and inexperienced. It is indeed a loss to the workplace when an experienced worker is released from the job. On the
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contrary I feel
this
 argument is baseless, because, unless the youngsters are given the opportunity to gain experience, there would not be any experienced
workers
 in the future. In conclusion,I oppose the changes in the
retirement
age
 because it would create an imbalance in the current structure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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