Some people think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

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enjoyment of your
life
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can happen to all ages. The
gladness
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of your
life
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can happen both young
age
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and mature
age
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.
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, It's
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on how you design your
life
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.
This
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essay will discuss in the following paragraphs both views as well as why
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personally think that living
happiness
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happily
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is driven by multiple factors.
Firstly
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, younger
people
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are extremely elated during
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age
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because they are not expected to earn money, take care of their family and suffered from any disease, as
parents
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their parents
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are already take
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are already taking
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care
for
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it.
In addition
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, young
people
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contain with many power, freedom and
life
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pathway.
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, they may seek some task or information that they didn't think before
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it. There might be
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an affect
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affect
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and change
the
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whole
life
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in the future.
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, most
people
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still think of being young
age
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as
a
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best time of their lives.
Secondly
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, the views of being mature
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is
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are
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like a table turns which is so much different from an adolescent. Being mature will come up with
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plenty of responsibilities due to a real chapter of your
life
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is
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starting. Some
people
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need to take care of their family,
working
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work
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hard to get money or
suffering
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suffer
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for
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from
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disease.
Moreover
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, most
of
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apply
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mature
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the mature
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people
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evaluate their
gladness
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by
the
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apply
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fame, wealth and prestige. These are suffered things compare to adolescent
life
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.
However
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, the
people
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who can
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these things might refer
as
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to
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a
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the
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gladness
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of
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in
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their
life
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. In conclusion, young
age
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and mature
age
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have their own personal way to determine the
gladness
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of their
life
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. In my opinion,
i
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believe that being young is the best part of
life
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that brings
a tremendous moments
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tremendous moments
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that you will never forget it.
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