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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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• In our modern life, In a few cultures,
children
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 are frequently told that They can accomplish their aim, if they try to
work
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 hard enough. Because if a person decides to succeed he will be
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. From my point of view, all
parents
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 should guide their child on the
right
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 path and there are a lot of advantages than disadvantages of all
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 need to organize what their child needs to do to achieve their goals. In
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 essay, I will examine both pros and cons of achieving success. • There are a number of significant benefits of working hard to achieve success.
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, the majority of kids are too lazy and do not want to
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 hard, so if they get into trouble, they just give up and do not want it for some period, if someone helps them to achieve their goal by showing them the
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 path, they will definitely
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 hard and if achieve their intentions. Another advantage is
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 don't know the difference between good and bad and they think that whoever shows them the
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 path is
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, and in ,
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 they need the help of their
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 and
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 should motivate their
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 by showing them the
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 way. • Turing the other side of the argument despite its benefits it
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 has it is disadvantaged.
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 of all,
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 attempt to
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 hard to
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 in their purpose, because of
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, they have many serious health problems, because they do not have a good appetite, and they do not eat breakfast or dinner, and they sleep very little, which is harmful to every child. • In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned up and I can come to the conclusion that for
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, motivation from someone is extraordinarily significant. From my point of view, if
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work
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 hard, they will surely achieve their goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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