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Parents are ideal teacher for thier children. Do you agree or disagree?

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parents
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 are the
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one
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teach
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 between right and wrong path.
parents
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 are the ideal mentor for their children. I totally agree with
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 of
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, in
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agree with
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statement and support
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firstly
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, as
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 with it that,
parents
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 are the finest instructor
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 their life. the main reason
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 supporting
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idea
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 child
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 most of
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time
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 in their home .to illustrate,all the
kid
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kids
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 spend most of
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time
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 with their family they are
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teach
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 them. how to sit
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in front
infront
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in front
 of elder people and how to respect them as well as . I belong
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 a desi family in our culture we have to teach everything to our children.
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, I would highlight
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 more major reason of agree with
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parents
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 could be the
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share
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 all their experiences of their life
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, my father always
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 me out in all thing
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 as business and many more
thing
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.
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, some
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people
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 disagree with them because nowadays most
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parents
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having
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 a negative
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mindset
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mind set
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mindset
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. every parent isn't
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 at all because some
parents
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 spoil their
kid
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kids
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 so the best teacher could be the school teacher for them.
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, many
parents
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 in Asia country doesn't let
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their kid complete their education because put their
son
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 into their business. to sum up,
parents
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 are ideal tech for them.
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I'm
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 agree with
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idea
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 and give some of the
reason
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such
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 as
spend
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 most of their
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their parent
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parent
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parents
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 and
share
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 their experiences as well as.
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 add some point of disagree as well as
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 as parent doesn't have
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their
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 kids .

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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