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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other peoplethink that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your view.

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Today, Companies are using
advertisement
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 as
one
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 of the
medium
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 to advertise their
products
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. Some
people
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 believe in
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 idea that advertising is extremely successful in persuading buyers or customers while others think that it is so common that
consumer
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consumers
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 don't usually pay attention to it. Both
the
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viewpoints will be elucidated in the subsequent paragraphs followed by my viewpoints
for
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on
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this
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 concern. On the
one
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 hand, Few
people
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 think that
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 can help in increasing
sales
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 and traffic on their websites. It can
also
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 help in increasing profit for the organization. To illustrate,
The
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Macy's is able to increase
it
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sales
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 of
products
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 during holidays by 10
percent
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per cent
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 every year. They advertise their new
sales
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 and offers on the other websites which
helps
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 in increasing traffic as well
sales
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 of their
products
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.
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, it can
also
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helps
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 in promoting new
businesses
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 to the outside world which can lead to
establishing
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 of small
businesses
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.
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, The BOAT headphones and
speaker
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the speaker
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 started their corporating by selling
products
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 through
advertisement
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 and marketing. Now it
is consider
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is considered
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as
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apply
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one
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 of the best headphones or
bluetooth
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Bluetooth
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 speaker
company
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companies
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 in India.
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, Many
people
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 felt that companies and
businesses
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 are only broadcasting
same
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the same
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 thing all over the internet.
As a result
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, many
people
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 don't usually pay attention to it as it has been seen and displayed by other
businesses
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. To elucidate, Youtube adds shows
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 before any video. In most cases,
listener
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the listener
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usually
usally
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usually
 skips the ad as it has already been seen and no
one
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 is interested in watching the same thing again. In Conclusion, I think that
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advertisement
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advertising
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 is helpful in persuading customers to buy new things. Many new companies are established and old
businesses
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 like Macy's are able to increase their
sales
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 by promoting through
advertisement
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.

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