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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend?

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There is a growing trend in people working remotely in countries.
Although
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this
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 might be justifiable for some industries, there are companies still opting to
work
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 onsite
due to
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 various outcomes.
To begin
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 with, the concept drew
alot
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a lot
interest
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 from the Information Technology and BPO sectors
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 its increased flexibility of the scope of
work
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.
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, research has proven that the productivity levels of employees working from home in these companies
has
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sky rocketed
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skyrocketed
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 over the years. For
an
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example, employees
has
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 control over their personal and the office life.
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 is largely
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 cutting time on transport and utilizing that time to prioritize office
work
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 and tasks.
In addition
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 to that,
this
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 has helped to improve their mental health and physical health
that
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 has been a driving factor
to improve
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in improving
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 quality of life.
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, the idea of remote
work
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have
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 detrimental effects
to
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on
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 the company culture.
Firstly
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, the loss of physical connection with
team mates
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teammates
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 has increased disputes in companies.
Secondly
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,
lack
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the lack
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 of proper infrastructure and dependability on technology has resulted in frustration and not meeting deadlines.
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, Microsoft who was
first
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 to implement
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 idea has taken a
u
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turn
due to
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 the fact it resulted in 40 percent less productivity among the employees. To summarize,
although
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 there are
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 positive outcomes
while
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 working from home,
this
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 might not be the case in some
inductries
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industries
due to
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 the impact
to
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on
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 its productivity. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 a careful
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on
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of
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 the business model is needed before applying
fully
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a fully
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 remote
conecpt
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concept
connect
 to any organization.

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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on each point you make. For example, you could provide more detailed examples or explanations for how remote work benefits mental health and quality of life. Additionally, you may want to address counterarguments more thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of your essay by using more linking words or phrases. Transition words can help guide the reader through your argument. For instance, instead of 'To begin with', consider using 'First of all' or 'Initially'.
task achievement
Your introduction provides a clear overview of the topic and sets the stage for the discussion. It effectively outlines that there are advantages and disadvantages to remote work.
task achievement
You have presented relevant points regarding the benefits and drawbacks of remote work, showing that you understand the topic well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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