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In some countries and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing .what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Few nations and their levels of
health
 and fitness are going down. I think there are many reasons behind it and I will discuss them in my upcoming essay.
Firstly
 the main of
this
 problem is eating junk
food
.
In other words
,
people
 nowadays prefer to eat oily and restaurant-made foods like- pizza, and burgers. It is not a healthy
food
 folk facing obesity and low breathing related disuse.
For example
, in the 21st era kids mostly want to eat outdoor
food
 with their friends and at birthday parties
also
.
Hence
, the number of discussions increases. The
second
 cause is less workout and physical activity. To explain it,
people
 are busy with their work and study and get a load of stress and anxiety
also
 8-10 hours of seating work
also
 make them lazy and change their body structure but the individual did not have any time to do exercise and medication and morning walk.
For instance
, a few days before a newspaper headline shows that in the past
people
 are in the present day less fit and happy. To solve
this
 problem, individuals should eat homemade and natural green
food
 and do 15-20 minutes of regular fitness activity which makes a person more energetic and healthy and give a good presentation as well.
As a result
, the nation's
people
 becoming more healthy and fit ( mentally and physically) .
Moreover
, authorities
also
 start programs to aware their motherland population about their
health
 and physical reacted issues.
Thus
,
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county's
people
 and authorities save a lot of money. In conclusion, there are many reasons to decrease
health
 and fitness not eating homemade
food
Also
 lazy to exercise but to get better
health
people
 to start eating healthy
food
 good amount of water and running.
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