It is often said that we live today in a “throwaway society” in which people buy things and soon after throw them away. What are the causes of the “throwaway society”? What problems could the “throwaway society” create?
In the modern era, people prefer to buy new things, rather than reuse the same ones, and the throwaway society is becoming prominent,
however
, it comes with some reasons and problems
, which I will discuss in the following paragraphs.
The first reason for throwing out things is the easy availability of everything, as children do not need to wait even a second to buy new toys
, due to
rich parents and the convenience of shopping plazas. Moreover
, so many parents do not want to waste time repairing or recovering the previous toys
because of their hectic schedules and these circumstances force them to buy new toys
. That's why, the public spends money on buying new things instead
of using the old ones. A recent study has shown from the United States that business people's families spend $1000 extra on new toys
every year for their children, due to
a lack of time to mend the older game.
The throwaway society also
causes some problems
, It not only creates pollution but also
impacts the lifestyle of human beings by spreading some diseases such
as cancer. A big example of plastic, which is being used by a plethora of people, but very few individuals reuse, and, recycle it. In addition
to this
, plastic-made products never diminish in the soil after being burned or destroyed, even if they pollute the soil, air, or water, they become harmful to human beings by consuming it through breathing or drinking water, as a result
, it leads microplastic in our bodies, lungs cancer, and, placental tissues and these issues are considered as the major problems
in the world. Hence
, throwing away society also
creates problems
worldwide.
To synopsize, I pen down saying that, the easy availability of everything is considered the main reason for buying new ones and diseases such
as lung cancer, created by pollution is the problem, which needs to be figured out by the governments.Submitted by hkaur14165 on
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task achievement
The essay does well to address the prompt by discussing both the causes and the problems of the 'throwaway society'. However, there are some areas where the argument could be clearer and more specific. For instance, when talking about plastic pollution, more precise details and examples could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Also, ensure each paragraph sticks closely to its main idea without mixing points.
coherence cohesion
While you did provide some supporting details and examples, strive to make them even more specific and varied. Instead of just mentioning studies, provide more context about the studies or consider using anecdotes, statistics, or other forms of evidence to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your essay well.
task achievement
Your ideas are relevant to the topic, and the points made align well with your argument.
task achievement
The essay provides a good balance between discussing the causes and the problems of the 'throwaway society'. This shows a thorough understanding of the prompt.
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