You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Dear Sampath
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I hope you are doing great and thank you for writing a letter to me. I received your letter and I am very happy with you that shared with me what u have a problem. I suggest that in your current situation, I can understand that you are in family trouble. I heard very bad news from your side,
Its
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your father
has
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died, I am so sorry for that bad news. I think now you are the man who handles your family. I strongly believe that you can do that responsible
job
for your family. You need to care for your mother &
brother
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and brother
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. I think now is the time your turning point in your life. Think it’s time to find a new
job
for you. It will help to care for your mother’s health & your brother's studies &
your
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and your
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future. Please you should apply for a
job
. I recommend you go accounting
job
. Which has a Banking field. You can find the accounting
job
from
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seek.com web site. Make a good CV and a cover page apply for all banking accounting jobs. I strongly believe you can find a Good
job
. All the best & will meet you soon. Your Best friend Karawita
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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