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In some countries the elderly are highly valued and respected, while in others youth is more highly valued. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#countries #youth
While some countries prefer to cherish old age
people
, other cultures cherish
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generation
. In my opinion,
young
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generation
 should be more appreciated.Both sides will be discussed in
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Nowaday
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, there are many sources, that help
to
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countries to develop. It's evident, that the young
generation
 has more knowledge about sources,
that
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 will help
to
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them to
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 become better. Unfortunately, as an
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 I can say, that in Kazakhstan young
generation
 is not valued, as it
needed
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. The older
generation
do
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 not respect and cannot always understand
young
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the young
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generation
's interests.
Furthermore
, old age
people
 are not always able to support youth, while knowing that the future in
young
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generation
's
shoulder
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shoulders
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. Without any
supportings
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supporting
 and cherishing,it is going to be more complicated to reach their goals and perspectives.
Moreover
, I should mention
creative
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 side of Lifestyle. It can sound rude, but anyways, the older
generation
 will
responsible
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 for creativity,
it
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 is going to be not quite fascinating. It is evident fact, that young aged
people
has
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 much more ideas to do culture's lifestyle
more funny
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.
In addition
, it is
really
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 Pleasant fact, that in some cases
old
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the old
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generation
try
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 to support
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the youngers
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youngers
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younger
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, it gives
people
 more motivation to make new creations, for
the
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apply
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certain
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countries
country's
countrie's
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countries'
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 development. For instants, by statistics,
for
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French culture is more appropriate to appreciate
young
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the young
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generation
,
as a
result
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 they are of the
modern
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most modern
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 countries in the world. To conclude,
young
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the young
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generation
 should be more valued in the current era. By valuing youth,
people
 can be sure about
country's
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the country's
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 future achievements.
Furthermore
,
people
 can not worry about
creative
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the creative
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 lifecycle.
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