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In some countries the elderly are highly valued and respected, while in others youth is more highly valued. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#countries #youth
In the world there are many
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 of cultures, respectively mentalities
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 separated differently.
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opinion
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the opinion
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 that in some cultures,
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old
age
 is more valued, while
some
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in some
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 cultures
they
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youth
 is more valued. In
contemporary
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the contemporary
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 world the
youth
 is more valued,
the
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 reason for
this
 is education. In comparison with old
people
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,people
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 the
youth
 learn and know better about technologies, digitalisation,
biotechnology
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and biotechnology
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,
in
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and in
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 short improvements in 21 century. To illustrate famous companies like Google, Microsoft, Facebook,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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 every year look for new employees. The main
criterie
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criteria
criterion
 is that applying
employee
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employees
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 must have
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 high education, apply with perspective and know foreign and programming languages. Of
course
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 these types of
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criteria
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 can be impossible for
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old
people
. As a matter of
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 I can say about
Kazakhstah
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Kazakhstan
. Since
country
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the country
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 was able to
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develop
develope
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develop
 several spheres
in
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 education, the
youth
 is been more valued. Special for them in
country
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the country
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was
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 built universities like Nazarbaev University, Astana IT University, Almaty International University and so on. Year by year old
people
are
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 not valuing. But the same types of
age
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ages
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not
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have not
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 stopped
on
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in
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 the
one-way
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one way
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. Old
people
also
studying
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,
learning
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,
practicing
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new spheres for them.
Moreover
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 many professors have old
age
. In
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one
word
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 I
satisfied
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am satisfied
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 with
fact
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the fact
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 that competition is available for both types of
age
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ages
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. To conclude I would like to say that not only the
youth
 deserves
being
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on
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driver's
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the driver's
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 seat. Life always remains with interesting competitions. The main thing is to do everything on time.
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