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International community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g gas and oil. Do you agree or disagree?

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Decreasing the usage of
resources
such
 as fuel and gas has been an international issue. My opinion is that every country should work together and take action instantly to achieve the goal. In the following paragraphs, I am going to discuss my viewpoints.
To begin
 with, lowering the quantity and the rate of consumption of fossil fuel has to be made
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 priority.
In addition
, governments should cooperate with each other to make
this
 happen. Obviously, due to industrialization, humans have consumed
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 of oil, which has produced massive carbon dioxide and led to natural disasters including global warming, sea levels rising and desertification. Natural calamities are happening and putting everyone’s lives at risk.
For example
, many coastal cities and islands like Venice and Maldives are facing the danger of being submerged owing to rising sea levels.
Therefore
, it is so urgent that it should be fixed as soon as possible.
Moreover
, oil and gas are limited
resources
 and they are running out in decades. In the near future, countries will fight for fossil fuels if we don’t reduce dependence on them and look for alternatives.
Therefore
, nations are supposed to take it seriously and work on decreasing the usage of these kinds of natural
resources
.
However
, renewable
resources
 like solar power and wind power need more advanced technology and higher cost which make international community cooperation so critical. That can make it more efficient and beneficial.
For instance
, developed countries
such
 as Germany should provide advanced technology and equipment for poor countries and help them to develop renewable sources of energy. All in all, the consequences of consuming large quantities of fossil fuels are happening and threatening people’s lives around the world.
Furthermore
, they are limited and it takes a great amount of cost and effort to invent their substitution. These make it very essential and compelling that international communities have to cooperate with each other to resolve the issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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