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Crimes and other kinds of information on television and newspaper have adverse consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It is generally acknowledged that the kind of
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 we see on television and in newspapers,
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 as
crimes
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, has an underlying negative effect on society.
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information
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 like
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 has to be brought to
people
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 for general awareness, I am absolutely convinced that
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 kind of
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 should be restricted in the
media
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. We will delve deeper into the reasons for
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 of all, it is true that
people
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 should be made aware of the happenings in their community, especially if they pose danger to society.
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, televising these kinds of
crimes
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, brutality, and violence can be detrimental to the future of society. The reason for
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 is that there are other audiences that will tend to follow and imitate what they see in the
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, especially for the minor age groups. They will gain an idea and knowledge as to how
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 event can happen.
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, the
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 should restrict what they broadcast. They only have to promote awareness but not promote violence by giving
people
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 detailed crime scenes.
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, in the research study conducted, it has been found that the
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people
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's knowledge of these kinds of
crimes
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, the lower the crime rates in the country.
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, in some countries, they only publish general
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 about the crime but do not give thorough or detailed
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.
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, their
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 focuses more on the positive side of their country's happenings. By doing
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, their
people
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 tend to focus more on the brighter side.
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,
people
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 are living their lives with less fear, less chaos, and more positivity, but they are made aware. In conclusion, I strongly agree that broadcasting detailed
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 about
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 events and
crimes
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 should be limited and restricted to the public. It should be published to promote
people
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's awareness only, but not to the extent of educating
people
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 about criminality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitize: To make someone less likely to feel shock or distress at scenes of cruelty or suffering by overexposure to such images.
  • Sensationalism: The use of exciting or shocking stories at the expense of accuracy, to provoke public interest or excitement.
  • Media Ethics: Principles and standards of conduct relating to the role and responsibilities of press and broadcast professionals.
  • Perception: The way in which something is regarded, understood, or interpreted.
  • Ignorance: Lack of knowledge or information.
  • Balance in Reporting: Presenting both sides of an issue or argument to provide a fair understanding.
  • Preparedness: A state of readiness, especially for unexpected events or emergencies.
  • Social Learning Theory: A theory that suggests people learn from observing others, including the behaviors, attitudes, and outcomes of those behaviors.
  • PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder): A mental health condition triggered by experiencing or witnessing a terrifying event.
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