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In the future, nobody will buy printed newsaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #nobody #newsaper #books
Nowadays,
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popularity
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the popularity
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 of technology has become a cause for concern for many
people
 and
this
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 effect on
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traditional media
such
 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and printed
books
 to be disappeared in the future. In my point of view, I partly agree with the statement and some points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the
internet
 provides
people
 with a wide choice of information and sources. Since
people
 have smartphones and laptops, they do not need to take a lot of time to search
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what
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For example
,
students
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for students
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research for their studies, the
internet
 will give a
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 of websites and
e
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book
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books
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 in a few minutes.
Furthermore
, online
publication
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publications
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 are more affordable financially because they do not rely on
paper
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 production industry.
As a result
, many customers can access
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electronic
books
 and sites by giving
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small
amount
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 of subscription fees
instead
 of paying for expensive printed
books
.
On the other hand
, some information on the
internet
are
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 not reliable as everybody can access and post easily on the website.
For instance
,
the
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 popular website among
the
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students
which
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is called Wikipedia,
people
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 can edit some resources effortlessly
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whatever
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what ever
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 they want to change.
Therefore
, all the facts even on the famous site cannot be
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.
Moreover
,
for
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the
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elderly
people
, they have
a
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difficulty in using
the
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website and mobile
phone
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phones
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.
Therefore
, they are more comfortable with printed
books
 . In conclusion,
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e-books
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e
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books
 and the
internet
 are a better choice for
the
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students but there
also
 have a drawback
in
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 some
point
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points
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.
Therefore
, younger and older
people
 might find
their
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comfortable ways to search
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for reliable
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