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Today's food travels thousands of miles before it reaches customers. Why is this? is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays , we can find any type of
food
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 in markets that some of which come from other
areas
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.
People
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 can buy
food
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 easily and sometimes they don’t know that some the
foods
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 have a long trip
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 there. Today, some
foods
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 and fruits are coming from other
places
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 because different
places
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 have dissimilar climates and it causes the
products
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 of any
place
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 to be different from other
places
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. So any
areas
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 have certain commodities and
people
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 are sending their
products
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 to other
places
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 they are receiving
products
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 from other
areas
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.
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, equatorial lands are the best
place
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 for growing pineapple and bananas, so
people
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 of all the world are buying them from equatorial lands and
people
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 of there have to send them their offer. Sending
food
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 over thousands of km has some positive and negative points.when fresh fruits are frizzed and transmitted by cargo ships or aeroplanes,they are not having that fresh tests after some days in porpoise.so
foods
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 aren’t fresh when arriving at the aim
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.
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, when Iranian merchants are sending tomatoes to Qatar ,it is possible that their
products
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 aren’t fresh as well as being in Iran in aim
place
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.
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 transmitted
foods
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 have some positive points . somewhere have not good earth for farm and the farm
products
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 aren’t good . So they can buy their
products
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 needs from another city or country.
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 ,some
places
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 have good earth and climate for certain commodities and can’t grow all of the
products
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 that they need them.
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 they can buy their needs from other
places
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.
for example
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, a
place
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 is not good for growing apples so
people
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 have to buy apples from
places
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 that have good conditions for growing apples. In conclusion, we understand that
food
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 travel has some negative and positive effects
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 we find that transmits are necessary for
people
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.because many of them live in
areas
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 that have no farm conditions.

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