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Today's food travels thousands of miles before it reaches customers. Why is this? is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays , we can find any type of
food
 in markets that some of which come from other
areas
.
People
 can buy
food
 easily and sometimes they don’t know that some the
foods
 have a long trip
to begin
 there. Today, some
foods
 and fruits are coming from other
places
 because different
places
 have dissimilar climates and it causes the
products
 of any
place
 to be different from other
places
. So any
areas
 have certain commodities and
people
 are sending their
products
 to other
places
also
 they are receiving
products
 from other
areas
.
for example
, equatorial lands are the best
place
 for growing pineapple and bananas, so
people
 of all the world are buying them from equatorial lands and
people
 of there have to send them their offer. Sending
food
 over thousands of km has some positive and negative points.when fresh fruits are frizzed and transmitted by cargo ships or aeroplanes,they are not having that fresh tests after some days in porpoise.so
foods
 aren’t fresh when arriving at the aim
place
.
instead
, when Iranian merchants are sending tomatoes to Qatar ,it is possible that their
products
 aren’t fresh as well as being in Iran in aim
place
.
Although
 transmitted
foods
 have some positive points . somewhere have not good earth for farm and the farm
products
 aren’t good . So they can buy their
products
 needs from another city or country.
also
 ,some
places
 have good earth and climate for certain commodities and can’t grow all of the
products
 that they need them.
Then
 they can buy their needs from other
places
.
for example
, a
place
 is not good for growing apples so
people
 have to buy apples from
places
 that have good conditions for growing apples. In conclusion, we understand that
food
 travel has some negative and positive effects
also
 we find that transmits are necessary for
people
.because many of them live in
areas
 that have no farm conditions.
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