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Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter: •Say how long you want to rent the apartment for, •Explain why your plans have changed, •Tell the owner about a problem in the apartment. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ……………., You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to request an extension on the rental contract for your apartment. As you may remember, I rented
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 flat five months ago, on the 1st of October 2024, for a six-month period. The reason for the six-month contract was mainly the thesis in my postgraduate major, which was already planned to be finished
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 of February 2025.
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, my tutor just informed me that
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 some new data that have to be gathered and included in the thesis, I have to spend an extra six months to finalize my dissertation.
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, I request you kindly extend the rental period for another six months. For sure, your concerns regarding the rent payments can be considered and agreed upon mutually. If you do not mind, I shall mention that there is a problem with the air conditioner inside the bedroom. The high-speed fan seems not to be working, and it would be appreciated if you could hire someone to repair it. I thank you in advance for your consideration and look forward to discussing
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. Yours sincerely, Abraham Streeter

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task achievement
Consider elaborating slightly more on how you plan to manage the extended stay to make your request more convincing.
task achievement
You provided a clear and complete response to the task by addressing how long you wish to extend the contract, why your plans have changed, and the problem with the air conditioner.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for this kind of correspondence.
coherence cohesion
The letter flows well with a logical structure, starting with the introduction, the reason for contract extension, and then moving to the problem with the air conditioner.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single main idea, making it easy for the reader to follow your explanation and request.
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