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The life cycle of the honey bee. Bees are very important for our planer but their cycle is so fucking hard what do you think?

The graph illustrates the life cycle of the honey bee. Overall, the length of the whole cycle is from 34 to 36
days
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. It can be divided into 3 main stages: egg, nymph and
adult
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.
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 of all,
adult
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 females are able to lay one or two eggs every three
days
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, so the egg stage starts from that point. To hatch, eggs need 9-10
days
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. While the newcoming bee
are
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 hatching, 5
days
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 goes through. Nextly, the nymph stage starts. Young bees need 7
days
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 to grow up, but, after that, they moult three times for nine
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 long meanwhile they are growing.
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,
whereas
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adult
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the adult
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 stage starts, young bees emerge
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as an
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an
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as
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adult
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partner
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. And they need only 4
days
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 to
maturnity
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maturity
maternity
.

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