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The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Although
 the practice of penalizing
students
 physically is reduced
but
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it is said that it should be used to discipline them. I disagree with
this
, as it is not in line with human rights and hitting
students
 could cause long-term side effects on their mental health.
Firstly
, in schools it is the responsibility of the teachers to bring out the best in their
students
 and beating them might cause them to become less attentive and bunk the
school
 at times. There are different choices to bring discipline to
school
-going
children
 like making them understand their bad conduct and motivating them to concentrate on their studies.
For instance
, when
children
 behave in a notorious manner in a lecture rather than punishing them, they should be given a responsibility where their notoriousness can be employed.
Furthermore
, in situations where
children
 are being physically abused, it may have a negative impact on their psychological health as they are in the developing stage. In
such
 cases, younger ones may have traumatic responses where they could face nightmares or can take extreme steps of mass shootings on
school
 premises. An example of
this
 is of a country where a student was hit by his educator and was bullied by his fellow classmates, in response to
this
 incident he used a rifle for firing in
school
 which led to the death of 25
children
. In conclusion,
students
 enrol in
school
 for getting educated and to have a prosperous future but corporal punishments can cause them to divert from their studies and take unwarranted decisions. So, it is necessary, to employ different methods to discipline the
students
 and make them increase their involvement in education.
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