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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agre or disagree?

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It is the belief of some that teenagers should volunteer to do
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service
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 even if there is no payment as it would be beneficial to both
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 as well as the teenagers themself. My take on
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 speculation and I would suggest that the younger generation should be encouraged to do so with the aid of their respective educational institutions.
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 projects give younger people the necessary exposure to the real world which help to create a sense of responsibility in a young individual. Though students learn about many of their duties from their homes and schools, getting a true responsibility,through various social works, would be much more educative. A great example of
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 is the
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 banks. Teenagers can learn a lot from
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 project,
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 as kindness, discipline, and knowing the value of
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. Engaging with
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 at
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 an earlier age would greatly impact their future decision regarding
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. Another significant positive aspect of
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 social
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 is that it evokes patriotism in an individual at
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 a younger age. Love for your country is a very crucial characteristic that an individual must possess because it would make one a better citizen in future.
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, a person who has experience in doing
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 services, cleanup programs, blood donations,
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 banks, charity etc., would surely be more compassionate toward his country and countrymen. In conclusion, engaging in
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 work at a very early age would definitely help to build a nation with responsible citizens and in the long
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 that nation would become more prosperous.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer work
  • community service
  • sense of responsibility
  • skill development
  • social awareness
  • empathy
  • crowdsource ideas
  • societal issues
  • broaden perspective
  • admissions process
  • resume enrichment
  • community welfare
  • mandatory volunteering
  • personal choice
  • positive experience
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