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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#think #residents #areas #government’s #responsibility
There are few
people
 who argue that citizens are responsible to keep their
neighborhood
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 neat and clean. While
,
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 some of them believe that it is only the responsibility of the
government
. Making the
environment
 clean is the equal
responsibly
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 of both the parties i.e. the residents of the
area
 as well as the
government
. I
also
 agree with the foremost statement that being the inhabitant of
the
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any residential
area
, keeping the
area
 should be the priority.
Similarly
,
government
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 should play their roles to maintain the cleanliness of all the areas of the country. In many Household areas, there could be some
small scale
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 problems rises on
daily
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 basis that can
be easily addresses
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 by the local
people
 to maintain the hygiene of the
area
. For
instances
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instance
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, standing rainwater on roads, or blocked drains can be cleaned by the municipality of the
neighboring
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area
. In South California,
people
 of small villages and residential buildings,
they
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arrange
monthly
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a monthly
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meeting
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 to
addresses
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people
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 issues to establish
the
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good atmospheric conditions for the locals.
Similarly
, the role of
government
 is equally significant for
the
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a
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 clean
environment
. There are various issues that can only be resolved by higher
government
 officials
for example
 reconstruction of roads
,
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 or
repairing
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the repairing
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 of gas or waterlines within the localities. These
sort
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 of issues will create a great impact on
householders
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householders'
householder's
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physical
physcial
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physical
 and mental health as well as on the atmospheric conditions, to keep the
area
 fit for humans, spontaneous actions are needed by the
government
. It is reported in
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Times newspaper that
US
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the US
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 launched a local resident portal for different areas of the state that badly needs
government
 attention for maintaining
the
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a
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clear
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clean
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 and hygienic
environment
. To sum up, I agree with both the statements
thats
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that
that's
 both
government
 and tenants should take a charge for
cleared
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a cleared
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 and neat
environment
.
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