Some people think money is one of the most essential factors in promoting hapinness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

Randomization was not observed and the
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was not blinded between participant and researcher due to the nature of the
intervention
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intervention
follow-up was made, which made it infeasible to assess the long-term effect on
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change. Measurement bias may occur as the IG were required to self-monitor their BW, WC and BP at home without any standardized methods.
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the community as the recruitment was carried out only among patients at the hospital, which may lead to
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potential selection bias. In general,
this
intervention
shows prominence in significantly reducing WC, BW, BP and serum
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FPG after 12 weeks. Diet and exercise
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change in diet and physical habits.
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change cannot be assessed properly and the sample size is quite modest and may not be representative
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the community. A standardized method for self-measurement should
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long-term effect before it can be implemented in the community.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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