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In some countries, the differences in ages between parents and children are greater than in the past. Do you think the advantages of the development outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #differences #ages #parents #children #development
In
this
 modern world, the gap in age between kids and
parents
 have a better benefit compared to the old time. I strongly agree that mature
parents
 are able to have financially and mentally stable. On the one hand,
parents
 get married later in age, their financial of them will be more stable than the new generation of
parents
. They spent more time-saving money and building up their own business,
then
 they can give the kids a better education.
On the other hand
, mature
parents
 should be encouraged their kids with their own life experiences.
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