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Earlier technology developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent development ever will To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
 is flourished by leaps and bounds in each and
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every
evefry
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fields
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 due to the innovation of
the
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technology
. Some
people
 say that these
automations
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automation
automatons
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alter
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humankind
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humankind's
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 lives who are the normal
people
 in earlier
technology
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advancement
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 as compared to
nowdays
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nowadays
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breakthrough
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. I strongly disagree with
this
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To begin
 with,
an
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automation
improvements
 are needed and mandatory for
mankind
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 lives especially nowadays
people
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because
becauswe
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because
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are
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 numerous
breakthrough
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can
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 aid
humans
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 life so become better than past days
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technology
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improvements
such
 as
dish
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dishwasher
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washer
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washers
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 and micro
oven
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.
For example
, nowadays, numerous women are
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working
workung
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working
 women,
therefore
 they cannot do their house chores but the new development of the technologies can reduce their work
borden
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burden
. In
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addition
additiion
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addition
,
this
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technology
 is diminished word load as well as
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 a lot of time.
Hence
, recent
technology
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 development is given more benefits than past
improvements
.
Furthermore
, travelling across
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the
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the
 world is
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the
teh
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the
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for
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of
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days
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breakthrough
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 because
people
 can fly wherever they like to do across the world by using
aeroplane
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.
Space
 research is
utmost
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 importance
in
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nowadays than
past
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time
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times
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,
therefore
 many
technology
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improvements
 can help to do
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research
reserch
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research
 in
space
.
For instance
, the world number one richest person
who
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Mr Elon Musk,
he
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found a special rocket which is
these kind
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 of go to
space
 with
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slight
safelight
satelight
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 after
release
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 the
satelight
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spotlight
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safelight
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space
then
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the
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earth
this
 is
an
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impossible in
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earlier
early
eariler
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earlier
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the
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technology
 but today is possible due to the innovation of the automation. To conclude,
recent
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 days
technology
brakthrough
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breakthrough
 is
utmost
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 importance for
people
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people's
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 lives not only today
people
 but
also
 the future humans. There are many advantages of recent
technology
improvements
.
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement in the
above mentioned
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 details.
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