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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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1. A polite way to ask customers if they want to order more food/ drink, what can you say? Suggested
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: Would you like some more potatoes? / Would you like another bottle of beer? 2. When you want your customers to drink something before their meal, what will you say? Suggested
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: Would you like something to drink before your meal? 3. What should you ask a customer(s) before you remove the plates of dishes they have just eaten ? Suggested
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: Have you finished ? 4. When a customer has asked you for the bill/check, it is polite and professional to respond/reply by saying. What can you say? Suggested
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: Of course. I’ll just go and get it for you./ I will be right back with your bill. 5. When you want your customers to write their signature/name on a small piece of paper when they are paying by bank/credit card. How can you say? Suggested
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: If you could sign
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, please. Sign your name here, please. 6. A polite way to ask a customer how they want to pay for the meal. What can you say? Suggested
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: How would you like to pay cash or card ? UNIT 4: TRANSPORTATION 1)When is the best season to travel in your city? Suggested
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: - in spring and summer 2)How can I go to your city? Suggested
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: - You can get there by plane (There is an airport named Phu Cat airport), or by train (Dieu Tri Railway station), or by coach. 3)When I need to get to Ho Chi Minh city as fast as possible, which means of transport would you recommend to me? Suggested
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: You should go there by express train 4)How much is a return air ticket to Hanoi at present? Suggested
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: If you book the ticket in advance, you can get a good discount so that the price is about 1.500.000 VND 5)What is another word for “return ticket”? Suggested
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: round-trip ticket 6)Are there any emvironment-friendly means of transport in your area? If yes, what are they? Suggested
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: Yes, there are. There are electric bikes, electric motobikes, electric cars for tourists.
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task response
Ensure that your examples and arguments directly relate to the prompt, and consider presenting a more balanced argument to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Continue to strengthen the organization and flow of your essay by using clear topic sentences and transition words to improve coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • cultural identity
  • ancestry
  • traditions
  • globalization
  • empathy
  • contemporary issues
  • integrate
  • perspective
  • civilization
  • diversity
  • innovations
  • historical significance
  • nationalism
  • cosmopolitanism
  • historiography
  • geopolitical
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