Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,with

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amount of entertainment

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being produced and more different kinds of

food

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being imported and exported,people,especially

children

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,are more likely to develop unhealthy

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lifestyle

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lifestyles

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since it is very easy for them to be enticed by junk

food

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and

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games.While admitting that

parents

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should take responsibility for solving the

problem

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and the number of

children

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who have unhealthy

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lifestyle

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lifestyles

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is large,I do not share the opinion that schools should

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be responsible for resolving

this

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problem

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. On the one hand,there are several reasons why I support the ideas that many

children

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now have unhealthy

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lifestyle

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and

parents

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should be responsible for solving

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problem

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.

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of all,because of the increasing pressure of study,

children

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are more thirst for having fun and enjoying themselves.

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,as the ability

of

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controling

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controlling

themselves is not strong enough to prevent

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from being addicted to computer games or other things,it is very common to hear the news that some

children

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have played the games whole night with

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no homework.

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,as for the most important people in

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’s

life

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,it is

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parents’

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the parents’

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duty to help their

kids’

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kids

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develop

good

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lifestyle

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.

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,they can control the time

children

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using

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their phones,they can

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cook

food

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for their

children

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as often as possible and restrict the pocket money

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have,so it is less possible for

children

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to buy junk

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on the street.If

parents

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don’t play a role in supervising their

children

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,no one else can do that.

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against

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the opinion that schools should take responsibility for solving the

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for the following reasons.

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,as the most important thing for

school

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the school

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to do is to teach

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knowledge

instead

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of

healthy

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lifestyle

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,

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it is not their duty to solve the

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which has been mentioned above.

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,different people have different ways

in

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of

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defining

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a healthy

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lifestyle

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because of their personal physical condition.Since a

teacher

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should teach more than 20 students,it is very difficult for

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teacher

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a teacher

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to understand everyone.So if

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teacher

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teachers

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use

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a strong-arm method,it might be harmful to some special

children

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.

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,if a

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children

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doesn’t live with their

parents

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,and the

teacher

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doesn’t allow him to use his phone,it must be difficult for him to live on himself without it. In conclusion,it seems to me that

parents

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should take responsibility to solve the

problem

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as

large

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number of

children

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have

unhealthy

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an unhealthy

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lifestyle

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life style

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lifestyle

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,but there is no need for schools to do that.