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Immigration has a major impact on society- What are the main reasons? To what consequences can it lead?

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People
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 moving from one
country
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 to another has been going on for a while now, and there are many causes of migration. Some of the top reasons include seeking work
Opportunities
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 and to improve
standard
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the standard
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 of living. There are both positive and negative effects that include economic
growth
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 and pressure on resources.
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 with, individuals migrate in search
for
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of
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 job
opportunities
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 and better education. Their home countries could be having limited employment
opportunities
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 and
education
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institution
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institutions
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 and they struggle to feed their families;
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, they decide to migrate and seek better lives elsewhere.
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third
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-world countries, whose citizens, move to Europe, the USA and Canada. Some countries are known to oppress their citizens for political and religious reasons
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 in Afghanistan
people
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 especially
the
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apply
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women are struggling for
the
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education and
favorable
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 work
opportunities
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 and
environment
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the environment
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 so more and more
people
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 are trying to leave the
country
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. On the positive side, immigration,
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, can result in economic
growth
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 for both
host
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 and
mother
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the mother
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country
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. The high level of
growth
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 in
United
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the United
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 States and Canada is largely driven by immigrants. They could contribute
in
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host
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the host
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country
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 by paying taxes, buying properties and spending most of their income within the
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 and the mother
country
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 can
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 get
benefit
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benefits
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 from the foreign remittances. On the negative side, the inflow of foreigners is draining physical infrastructures
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 as hospitals, sewerage systems, water supply and transport systems. These newcomers need water, health services, and to move from one place to another. In conclusion, immigration occurs
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people
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 are seeking better job
opportunities
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 There are
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 benefits and drawbacks
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 as
growth
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 in the economy and straining the resources
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