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Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #people #countries #government #money #adult #population
In many nations, schooling is
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 of  youngsters’ life. And other believe that the
government
 ought to spend
lots
 of
money
 on
an unknowable adolescents
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unknowable adolescents
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 who cannot read and write well. I completely agree with
this
 view and think that authorities should spend more
money
 on unknowable
adults
, because they may be well-qualified and important people who can be useful to society.
First
 of all, I believe that by spending too much
money
 on the
education
 of adolescents who do not have
lots
 of knowledge, the
government
 can make them well-educated people during the academic year.
This
 way
,
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 can show its good result for the
country’s
 budget and
country’s
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 development if they spend
lots
 of
money
 on adult
education
.
For example
, in the USA,
government
 spend way more
money
 and always to be attentive to adolescents’ teaching,
as a result
 of these things
this
country’s
education
 system possesses a high rank among the too many counties.
Thus
, we should be attentive and spend too much
money
 on
adults
’ schooling, in order to them to be up-and-coming people duration of their life.
Second
 of all, if authorities spend too much
money
 on unknowable
adults
'
education
 after  they might see excellent results.
In other words
, if
government
 spend a myriad amount of
money
 afterwards adolescents try to change from an unknowable position to the right
ones
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. Take an example, in Australia,
adults’
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 teaching method was poor quality after their
government
 spend a large amount of
money
 on their
education
 and
then
 almost all students were able to write and read as well and
this
 thing good affected
this
country’s
 development.
Therefore
, authorities ought to spend myriad amounts of
money
 on their poor-quality
adults
. To conclude, I believe that
government
 should spend
lots
 of
money
 in order to increase the knowledge of unknowable
adults
 after they can affect to
country’s
 progress.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education
  • young people
  • government
  • money
  • adult population
  • read
  • write
  • development
  • nation
  • improve
  • quality of life
  • investing
  • reduced
  • poverty
  • income inequality
  • funds
  • balancing
  • budget allocation
  • crucial
  • equal access
  • opportunities
  • promoting
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • positive effects
  • society
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