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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #countries
Nowadays the number of
students
for
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studying abroad significantly has increased.
Accordingly
;
this
 issue can be considered a new social phenomenon.So; there are some advantages
such
 as gaining a distinct cultural experience
also
 it surely has disadvantages like economical problems due lossing lossing
workforce
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 in the future. On the one hand;
students
 who study at colleges or universities in foreign countries will be able to become familiar with a different culture.
consequently
, after their
graduation
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 they can be considered
as
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an authentic person for the facilitation of
connection
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connections
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 between companies or communities.
For example
; a Finnish student who will graduate from
an
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 university in
UK
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the UK
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 in international business might be a striking choice for companies that are interested in finding
a
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 appropriate
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target
torget
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 market in the UK.
On the other hand
; some economical problems can create under influence of
students
' departure. Admittedly, the youths are the most valuable source for all countries.
As a result
; governments do not really like their young men and women to be easily absorbed by the other public.
For instance
; based on the obvious evidence, the vast majority of
students
 who study or will be graduated at
the
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US universities never go back to their own territories for working
also
 living.
Subsequently
,it can be mentioned as one of the biggest drawbacks
about
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this
 topic. To sum up; all social phenomena can have dual aspects, beneficial and disadvantageous.
In addition
,
such
 social difficulties are undeniable in the modern world,
thus
 governments and socialists should make a concerted effort to investigate and solve
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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