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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything they want if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Some
children
 are often told that they can get anything they want as they try hard enough.
This
 message really
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 them in making them succeed.
However
, it will
also
 create them tough to embrace failure. In
this
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aforementioned
aforementined
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aforementioned
 key advantage and
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. Since
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a child
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child
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, some
of
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the
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children
 have been taught in struggling to get something. They face different
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 in every phase as they grow. Getting older,
children
 are familiar with
this
 famous phrase, "there is no effort that
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 result", which means as long as we try, we can get anything we expect. As an example, I planned to enter my targeted university after high school.
Thus
, I study day and night before
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 exam because I believe that those are my weapons. And yes, they are my fighter as I
finally
 got to my dream university. The phrase really works
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 me.
However
,
this
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 can produce another side too. One of the
disadvantage
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 is attempting them difficult to admit any failure. In reality, the
precceeding
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preceding
 phrase did not always function. In fact, every
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 is caused by multiple factors. It is not only because of the person
itself
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, there are numerous aspects that influence the "goals".
This
, sometimes culminating
child
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 to think that they have
not
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strive
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 enough, they did not give their full action, when they actually did. They do not know when they have to stop and take another path. I once failed to be an exchange student candidate at school. It
just
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 one step more to get the opportunity, but I missed it. If I did not learn how to accept and deal with it, I surely will live with guilt
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myself. All in all, teaching
children
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struggling
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struggling
 to pursue their dream is not wrong.
However
, another thing that should be done is
also
 to teach them in accepting failure. If not, It will
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bad
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effect
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with
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 their mental health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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