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the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

#tourists #caribbean #island
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The line graph illustrates the
quantity
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 of
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travelers
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 who visited a certain Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. Overall, it is clear that the
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 of
visitors
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stayed
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 in two different places all increased dramatically,
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 the degrees were different. The
number
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 of
visitors
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who remained
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remained
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 on cruise
ship
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 used to be
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less and the total
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 of tourists always
top
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topped
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 the list. In terms of
total
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a total
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number
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 of
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travelers
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travellers
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 who visited
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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. In the
first
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 five years, there was a steady growth from 1
million
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 to 2.7
million
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.
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, the
number
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 of
all the
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visitors
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 kept stable
in
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next
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the next
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one
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year. Between 2016 to 2017, that of
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tourists rocketed from 2.7
million
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 to 3.5
million
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. With regard to
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 of
the
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tourists who lived
on
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in
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 two different types of places. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 who lived on
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island
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the island
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 remained the same
at
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in
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 the
first
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 year. There have a slightly rose from 2011 to 2012 and reached
the
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 peak at 1.5
million
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. When the
number
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 of
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travelers
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travellers
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stayed
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who stayed
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 on the
island
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decrease
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, that of the
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travelers
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travellers
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remained
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 on the cruise ship outnumbered and became the
second
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 top of the list.
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 went up to 2
million
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 since 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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