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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
The concept of veganism has captured the attention of many people worldwide. There are many crucial discussions
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 concept as well as the positive impacts of avoiding animal products completely
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 and gaining energy solely using plant products.
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, I believe that eliminating meat from
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 will not make it healthy, and the micronutrients they provide and the benefits of humans consuming meat on the environment are undeniable. In
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 I will elucidate my judgement
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, the amount of trace nutrients and minerals these
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 productions provide substantially
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 to the development and sustainability of the human body is immense. Even though there are processed
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 meats available in the market,
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 will never meet the nutritional sources of meat products. If people
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 to avoid these foods, they might suffer from nutritional
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deficiencies
 which will exacerbate the situation.
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, when a prodigious portion of the global population embraces veganism, the plants utilized in the production of these food items will rise substantially.
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 and will develop a scarcity of food, which will eventually lead to a food crisis. The disruption caused by
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 an excess of these animals in the environment, which can be a catastrophic scenario. The more the plants are consumed, the more it interferes the nature’s
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. In conclusion, even though there is a misconception that going vegan is a better choice for our well-being, it can bare unexpected repercussions.
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, progressive adaptation to a vegan diet will rectify most of the health and environmental issues it can cause.
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