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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the distant future, some
people
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 believe that printed newspapers and
books
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 will be replaced by free reading access on the internet.
Although
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 it might be possible that online reading will occupy a huge part of the industry, I partially agree with the presented statement. The creation of the internet gave us unlimited access to all sources of media including
books
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 and newspapers that are available for
further
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 usage in a couple of clicks.
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, many
people
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 find paying for information a waste of money as they can access the same information for free.
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, most bookstores are calling for bankruptcy
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 low revenue in sales.
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, I think it will not kill the entire industry,
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 it might drop in sales, some
people
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 would always choose printed ones because they give a unique experience as opposed to digitalized ones. Printed information can be favourable for some individuals as they give some feeling of attachment to the work. Apart from that,
people
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 find it hard to concentrate on reading
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 smartphones owing to constant notifications and messages that can appear on the screen,
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people
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 are inclined towards reading printed
books
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.
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, there has been going a trend, where
people
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 try to minimize the usage of the internet and to find alternatives for it.
On the other hand
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, when you buy a book, you
also
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 appreciate the author of
this
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 by buying. In conclusion,
although
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 online reading is taking over the industry, it is unable to give
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 an experience as real
books
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 are able to give.
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, many will prefer to buy as it represents their appreciation of the work.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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