The young can get easily influenced by the internet. What could be the reasons for this? What can be done to exercise more control over their use of the internet. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Now a days
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internet
is an unavoidable thing at the time. The world will stop without a network connection. Because
,
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most of all organizations are connected with
this
root. Not only youngsters but
also
all age
group
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people are using the
internet
in their daily life. I strongly agreed that network connections are directly related to youth people. There are so many reasons we consider that youths get easily attracted by the web connection. To commence with the children from their childhood already
parents
have introduced them to the world of
internet
.
Moreover
,
the
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school is an easy way to get busy and entertained. Because
,
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there are so many ways available.
For example
, there are a lot of games, social media, and movies that are easily accessible with a single click.
Furthermore
,
parents
are busy with their life and they have no time to spend with their children even for their studies.
Parents
are given
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the duties of modern technologies. So youngsters can find the solution through the
internet
.
Moreover
, they don't know the alternative ways. Another approach would be to suggest children go into encouraging positive behaviour
such
as reading and the other informative article. The youngster could be encouraged by teachers and
parents
to other ways of study and join clubs.
Moreover
, go for tours and outings with friends. In conclusion, I would say excess of everything is bad and there should be a limit for youngsters the use of the
internet
and it should be regularly checked by elders.
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