Social media is gradually replacing in-person face-to-face contact with many people worldwide. Do the benefits of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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era, technology has developed quite significantly and because of that
people
are getting many types of
benefits
of that
people
are getting many types of
benefits
in their life. At the outset of the new
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almost everything is functioning online
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now
people
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started working online from the comfort of their home, individuals like to communicate on social
media
instead
of physical meetups etc. If I specifically convey
about
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social
media
than
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there are both positives and
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aspects of it. As per my point of view, I strongly agree that
benefits
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of social
media
outweigh the cons of it. To embark on, it is true that nowadays craze of social
media
is increasing too much.
Moreover
, research conducted by
British
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Institute of Learning depicts that humans of
this
modern world spend almost 40 % of their professional
benefits
or for their personal use.
Furthermore
, because of social
media
, commoners get to know
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information regarding all aspects without much effort. To add on,
person
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a person
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can promote his/her company or product with the help of social
media
.
One
of the biggest
advantages
of social
media
is that it is entirely free to start. None of them
have
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signup fees of any sort, so the only investment individual will need to make is in the form of time.
Additionally
, it has so many
advantages
for students like it is often easier and more convenient to access information, provide information and communicate via social
media
to individuals around the world.
On the other hand
,
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to their
advantages
, social
media
has a few disadvantages as well.
First
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of
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,all is
lack
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of privacy. Another disadvantage is
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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.
One
of the most dangerous
aspect
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of social
media
is nowadays
people
are preferring social
media
communication over
face to face
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communication. I feel because of
this
people
are losing
self confidence
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self-confidence
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while talking to a person which is personally in from of him/her.
Finally
, addiction is regarded as
one
of the most commonly felt cons of social
media
platforms.
This
addiction has affected the global teenage population in a majority of negative ways. To recapitulate, social
media
is
one
of the most popular tools used on the internet in recent times. A wide number of social
media
platforms make it possible for millions of
people
around the world to connect with
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each other
eachother
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each other
. As per my
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understanding
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understanding
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the
advantages
of social
media
are plenty if we compare with
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disadvantages. I feel we should be careful and use social
media
platforms in
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right way to get
plathora
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plethora
of
advantages
.
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