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Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Cell
phones
 are the greatest invention in the 21st century, But some
parents
 think that Mobiles cause trouble for their
children
. In
this
 ,essay we are discussing both merits and demerits of the usage of mobile
phones
. On the one hand,
Cell
phones
 cause a great distraction to their
children
. In the olden
days
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Kids
 are more active in their sports activities
although
 it is very good for both physical and mental health, now
kids
 are more attracted to online games. Nowadays
children
 are more dependent on mobiles , like calculating simple mathematical problems
also
kids
 are using a mobile in spite of using their brains. Some
apps
 are intentionally making their
apps
 to make the
children
 lazy by designing them to stay on their app/website for more
time
. Recent Studies state that
Children
 who use mobiles more have to lack
of
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social interaction/skills than
Children
 who don't. In some ,cases
parents
 are giving the
children
 bait to do the things they want or make the
kids
 stopping from crying or Stopping them from getting outside/playing.
On the other hand
,
Cell
phones
 are very useful for
children
 in many ways. Nowadays people are learning a lot of things using the internet, for
kids
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 it is a very useful tool to explore their Enthusiasm.
Kids
 can download their study syllabus using mobile
phones
. In tough situations like Corona pandemic
Cell
phones
 are used as a life-saving tool in which
children
 attended their classes.
kids
 can surf their doubts on the internet even when the Teacher or
Parents
 fails to Explain them. There were many useful
apps
 like BYJU'S, Babycode and Flamingo. In my opinion
Cell
phones
 plays a Good and bad role in a
kids
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 life,
Children
 should be provided with mobile
phones
 for a limited
time
 to maintain balance.
Kids
 should be allowed to access Educational
apps
 and some play
time
 on their mobile. Every
parents
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parent
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 should give their
Kids
 lesser mobile
time
 and more of their personal
time
.
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