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Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#parents #cell #phones #children
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Cell
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phones
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 are the greatest invention in the 21st century, But some
parents
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 think that Mobiles cause trouble for their
children
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. In
this
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 ,essay we are discussing both merits and demerits of the usage of mobile
phones
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. On the one hand,
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phones
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 cause a great distraction to their
children
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. In the olden
days
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Kids
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 are more active in their sports activities
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 it is very good for both physical and mental health, now
kids
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 are more attracted to online games. Nowadays
children
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 are more dependent on mobiles , like calculating simple mathematical problems
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kids
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 are using a mobile in spite of using their brains. Some
apps
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 are intentionally making their
apps
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 to make the
children
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 lazy by designing them to stay on their app/website for more
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. Recent Studies state that
Children
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 who use mobiles more have to lack
of
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social interaction/skills than
Children
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 who don't. In some ,cases
parents
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 are giving the
children
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 bait to do the things they want or make the
kids
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 stopping from crying or Stopping them from getting outside/playing.
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,
Cell
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phones
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 are very useful for
children
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 in many ways. Nowadays people are learning a lot of things using the internet, for
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kids
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 it is a very useful tool to explore their Enthusiasm.
Kids
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 can download their study syllabus using mobile
phones
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. In tough situations like Corona pandemic
Cell
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phones
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 are used as a life-saving tool in which
children
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 attended their classes.
kids
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 can surf their doubts on the internet even when the Teacher or
Parents
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 fails to Explain them. There were many useful
apps
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 like BYJU'S, Babycode and Flamingo. In my opinion
Cell
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phones
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 plays a Good and bad role in a
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kids
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 life,
Children
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 should be provided with mobile
phones
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 for a limited
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 to maintain balance.
Kids
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 should be allowed to access Educational
apps
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 and some play
time
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 on their mobile. Every
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parents
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parent
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 should give their
Kids
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 lesser mobile
time
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 and more of their personal
time
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.
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