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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
While it is true that some people argue that the major environmental
issues
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nowadays
is
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 the loss of some species of flora and fauna. While I accept that
this
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but
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I believe that there are more important
environment
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 issues that are causing our mother earth to get
damage
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 over every generation. On the one hand,
extinction
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 of some particular species of plants would
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caused
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 a linkage of
food
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the food
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 chain in
the
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natural
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.
For example
,
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the numbers
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numbers
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 of
herbivore
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 that consume that plant would decrease and it may lead to
decrease
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 in
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the numbers
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numbers
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 of
animals
 in the
next
 pyramid level.
Hence
, a great deal larger
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animals
 would try to obtain their meals from the other routes as well as
eating
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 crops planted difficulty by the farmers and target domestic
animals
 as their prey.
On the other hand
, air pollution and water pollution were
also
an
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important environmental problems
cause
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 by human beings. Carbon monoxide produced by transportation,
fumes
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and fumes
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 that
contains
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 chemical production were namely the principal
caused
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 of air pollution. Water was polluted by
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being
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beings
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of
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fertilisers when growing crops, removing toxic chemicals from factories and throwing
wastage
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 into rivers or drainage
and
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which
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 may
caused
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cause
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blockage
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the blockage
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. Global warming was
also
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environmental
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an environmental
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 problem that broke down
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and ultraviolet light would
shoots
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 in and causes
temperature
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the temperature
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 of the
global
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 to rise.
In addition
, glaciers and
ice bergs
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icebergs
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melts
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, polar bears
was
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 forced to swim for a long period; water levels
rises
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,
lots
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and lots
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 of areas that are lower would be flooded
includes
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Maldives
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the Maldives
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 and some islands. In conclusion,
although
loss
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the loss
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 of particular species of plants and
animals
 would cause
environmental
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an environmental
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problem
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,
but
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there
are
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 still
tremendous
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a tremendous
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example
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 of problems that are more important to cause damage to our earth.
Submitted by lisapong12062003 on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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