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Some believe that standardized English exams, like IELTS, are just big business to make money. others, however, think that standardized English exams are important for society. Which do you believe and why Give explanations and examples to support your explanations with support your opinion.

#believe #english #exams #ielts #business #money #society #explanations #support
Some
people
 think that public English exam which
evaluate
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evaluates
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individual's
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an individual's
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 English skills has
a
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the
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 sole purpose that
make
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making
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 a lot of profits.
In
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On
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the other
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other hand
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another hand
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, there are many protesters, like me,
believe
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who believe
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 that it is a very useful tool to prove
social
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a social
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member's
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members'
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 English achievement and proficiency. Due to
of
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their hectic schedule, modern
people
 would rather give cash
gifts
instead
 of in-kind. Apparently, contemporary citizens are under great stress and have to be always engaged in either their work or study.
As a result
, they do not have enough time to prepare
gifts
 because they are usually deeply stuck in their workplaces or schools.
Furthermore
, as they do not have ample time to spare and learn about others’ preferences, they think that it is a more practical thing to do.
For instance
, in South Korea and other East Asian countries like China,
people
 opt to send through applications like KakaoTalk or WeChat. From my perspective,
this
 development spawns positive consequences.
Firstly
, both giving
gifts
 in kind and in cash show the giver’s well wishes to the receiver. From the recipients’ point of view, they are more grateful for the sincerity of the giver than for what they receive.
Secondly
, celebrating events
such
 as the
first
 birthday of a colleague’s or a friend’s baby generally accompanies considerable expenditure on the reservation of the party room, food catering service, and so on, the giver’s cash
gifts
 are properly utilized in these situations.
Finally
, many
people
 usually end up giving the same kind of present which can be very impractical. In conclusion, it is clear to me that giving money is a more reasonable choice which is perfectly suitable for the
people
 living in the modern world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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