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Some governments spend a lot of money on exploring space. Some feel that this investment is justified while others think that money should be spent on public services like health care and education. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Since the 1960s, governments have been investing in astronautics to explore other planets outside of the earth. There are controversies about whether the
money
 should be spent on other public services
instead
 of spending on
space
 exploration.
This
 essay will discuss opinions from both sides from the perspectives of the worth to find resources from outer
space
 and the citizen welfare budget. On one hand, the population on earth has been growing rapidly, while the natural resources around us are expected to be used up in a foreseeable future,
this
 is an undeniable fact that the government should start looking for new resources for a substitution or moving some of the population to the other planets.
For example
, exploring
space
 is to find another suitable place for
people
 to live in. The
money
 invested in astronautics is worth trying.
On the other hand
,
people
 on
this
 earth are suffered from illness and poverty, governments should spend more
money
 on health care and education.
For example
, Russia was a communist leader in to developed the
space
 industry in the old days while thousands of
people
 were poor and hungry. The government should spend more on public services to take care of its
people
. In summary, the controversy in the
space
 industry will be continued
between
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 whether the
money
 should be spent on improving public services or keeping on investing in
space
. In my opinion, outer-
space
 investment is still important but should be performed by well-developed countries. While the poor country should put the citizen welfare as the highest priority.
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