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A recent survey shows that in many countries across the world people are generally living longer. But an increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of a longer life expectancy on individuals and society?

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An ageing society is one important problem that most
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, whether ageing individuals have an effect on whole societies is a controversial issue. In my opinion, the elderly situation has negative implications in many
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.
People
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’s lives are getting longer with technological development. In some areas, we can find
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 of
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 over 100 years old. Meanwhile, young
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 don’t want to have a baby early because they are working in
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 world full of competition.
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, reducing the population is an extremely important problem that many
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 have to address, especially some developed
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.
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, you can see there are
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 of elderly
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 on public transport, in parks, and in supermarkets. At the same time, many elderly
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 have to continue working even though they have retired. The simple reason is that there is a lack of young
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 willing to work and replace them. Some old
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 need to take care of their grandchildren because their children are very busy.
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, the government should provide
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 of resources for an
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 society. They need to spend
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 of money on the elderly themselves. Investing in public health, creating care
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 for the elderly, and building some entertainment facilities for the elderly are all examples. So the government either needs more money from all the taxpayers or reduces the investment in other options,
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 as infrastructure, public education, entertainment, etc.
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, young
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 have to spend time taking care of their parents,
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 they are very busy, so some of them always make mistakes in their jobs because of pressure. In conclusion, an
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 society is a popular problem that
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 of
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 should face. I believe it could be resolved in the future.

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