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Some people say that communication by using computers and phones will have side effects on young people’s writing and reading skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 by using electronic devices is seen as a negative thing which has detrimental impacts on youngsters’ writing and reading skills. From my perspective, I agree with the idea.
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 with, it is no deniable that technology has become a crucial part of our daily lives.
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, using virtual applications for a small chat is a popular choice amongst younger generations. Despite the way it brings about convenience, it
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 turns out loss of vocabulary and grammar.
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, if a friend tells me a funny thing face to face, I will definitely say that it is so funny and give her my thoughts, while I only send ‘lol’ when it happens online. When I use a phone or computer to chat with friends, I always feel tired and troublesome to type
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, and in that case, I always choose to type as short as I can. As a consequence, I forgot how to write some
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, even in my mother language, when I used a pen to write a letter on paper. Over-reliance on mobile phones leads to youngsters losing their ability to spell correct
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 and use proper grammar.
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, an increasing number of
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 are becoming more willing to make friends on social media today. And in
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 prefer to share music and funny video clips with their friends rather than private affairs.
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, using stickers to express their feelings and attitudes is a prevailing trend in young
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’s world.
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, using more stickers means there are fewer
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 in
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, and I regard it as one of the significant reasons why young
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 are losing their writing and reading skills. In conclusion, high technology gives numerous benefits to our lives,
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, there are conspicuous side effects to youngsters’ literacy ability,
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 as loss of vocabulary and grammar, wrong spellings, and surficial content of the
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, I appeal that
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 should give priority to their interpersonal relationships and have more face-to-face
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