Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people argue that pupils only achieve good academic results thanks to rewards. In my opinion,

however

, I believe that punishment

also

contributes to the success of learners’ performance. On the one hand, there are some reasons why prizes can encourage

students

to study better. The

first

reason is that being rewarded will stimulate

students

to learn. To be more specific, learners have a sense of recognition when they are given a reward in a lesson.

Moreover

, they believe that their efforts are accepted and they will try harder to acquire more goals.

As a result

, they will devote more time

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learning to obtain higher marks. The

second

reason to support

this

opinion is that prizes can motivate

students

to challenge themselves.

For example

, learners are encouraged to do a

particular

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difficult task to obtain a present that no one has ever achieved before. By doing so, it might involve most of the

students

to join

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and

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an environment in which

students

have a chance to break their

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.

On the other hand

, I would argue that

students

sometimes should be punished in order to perform better at

school

.

Firstly

,

this

can help to raise their awareness of responsibilities.

For instance

, pupils cannot be granted any presents if they fail to do homework. What is more, doing

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exercises

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exercises

at home is beneficial for them to revise all the knowledge for their final tests.

Therefore

, if they don’t finish that task, there should be some measures to punish them so that they will be aware of their missions in the future.

Secondly

, punishment at

school

might result in lower proportions of those who drop out. It is believed that schools are the sole places to gain knowledge and

students

cannot go anywhere to learn. If they violate any of the

school

rules, their names will be put

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the

black list

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.

Hence

, pupils will be conscious of the importance of

school

and try to be well-

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to learn. In conclusion,

although

prizes can give motivation to

students

, they should be approached

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rules and consequences if they want to study better.