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Socail media is gradually repalcaing in person face to face coontact with many people worldwide.Do the benefits of social media outweight the disadvantage?

#socail #media #person #face #coontact #people #outweight
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In recent years, there is a growing recognition of
popularity
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 of social
media
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 which is replacing
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 interaction among
people
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 many
society
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societies
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of
this
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 issue. On the one hand, it is obvious that there are many significant
benefit
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benefits
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 when social
media
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app
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apps
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take
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 the place of
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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community
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 in today’s society. One of the major merits is that social
media
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 allow
people
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 to
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community
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the community
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any
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at any
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 time in a variety of ways,
it
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which
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 means that users do not need to be near the person there are
talk
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 to. Take
facebook
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Facebook
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 as
example
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an example
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. Users can use
facebook
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 messenger
to
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for
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community
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 urgent and
people
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 can joke with friends in group chat.
As a
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result
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,result
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 Users can
community
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 with friends and family very easy. Another positive is need to
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mentioned
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 is that
,
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apply
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 the quality
community
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 is better,
this
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 is mainly because
people
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 can talk to their partner
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through
throught
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through
 video, voice or simple
messenge
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message
 depending on the situation.
Consequently
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, the geographic gap is narrowed because of social communication.
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, there are some
shortcoming
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shortcomings
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 when using social
media
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 to
communication
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is
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omnipresence. The
first
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 obvious
and
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demerit is that
people
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 do not
direct
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have direct
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 interaction. In other
word
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words
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,
people
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 have few outdoor
activity
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activities
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. The result of
this
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 is that more and more
people
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 do not
like
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 hang out, which
lead
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leads
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 to
decrease
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a decrease
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 health of
people
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. Another negative aspect is that modern
couple
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 meet through Tinder and break up on
facebook
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 messenger.
Thus
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, they do not go outside their home to interact.
As a
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result
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 the population is becoming isolated and lonely. In conclusion,
people
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 speak
face
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 to
face
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 less than ever today, my opinion advantage
outweigh
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outweighs
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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,
people
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 should try to find
balance
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a balance
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 between the time they spend talking online and talking
face
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 to
face
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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