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Some believe that pupils should be given less homework, others say the opposite. What is your opinion?

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There is a saying that "Today's
Children
 are tomorrow's future",
Therefore
 some people think that
Children's
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Children
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 should get more
Homework
. In
this
 essay today we are discussing how
Students
 are affected due to more
homework
 and the benefits of less
homework
 in their lives. On one hand, Some people think that getting heavy
homework
 gets greater marks but in ,reality pupils are getting so stressed due to
this
. In nowadays corporate Schools and Colleges are
also
 thinking that giving assignments and notes to their
students
 will lead to better study. A recent study states that most of the
students
 are exhibiting signs of dullness, not exhibiting feelings etc.
On the other hand
, Kids who have less
homework
 are more active and Social.
Also
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 they exhibit good signs of positive attitude & good learning skills. While they get free time
then
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they
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 remain
students
 so they are pursuing their dreams in dreams in sports, arts etc. A recent study states that
students
 who are active in all aspects are succeeding in life more than
students
 who are concentrating on only one thing.Present-generation parents are
also
 thinking that their
children's
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children
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 should get less
homework
 for their well-being. In conclusion,
the
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pupil should get less
homework
 because it will improve their mental ability to think and do other things.
Also
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 parents should give their
children
 some time for Physical activity and fun time.
Also
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 kids are enthusiastic about learning new things like sports, technology, arts, science etc. kids are
also
 performing in academics with little stress on their minds.
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