Some people think that competitive sports have positive effects on teenager education, while others argue that effect is negative. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Generally,

sports

are more attractive among young children when compared with

education

.Few parents believe that

sports

impact

studies

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the studies

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of children positively.

However

,some people oppose the argument. In my opinion,

sports

help

students

to perform well

with

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their

education

.Both views are discussed

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the following paragraphs. As mentioned above, physical activities

such

sports

improve

student's

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students'

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studies. When

students

are involved in

sports

competitions, they tend to use both body and mind to compete with opponents.

Thus

, skills

such

as quick

decision making

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, time management,

resource

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and resource

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management skills are enhanced.

This

help

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helps

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them to use similar tactics or methods

learn

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to learn

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faster with academic modules.

Further

sports

competitions help teenagers to manage stress as they

have

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apply

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to perform

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perform

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within

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within

a stipulated time.

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, they could follow

same

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approach

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approach

when they do an exam. Apart from some of the positive points mentioned above,there are negatives too. When

students

get attracted to

sports

, they tend to forget other important tasks

such

as learning or accumulating knowledge. Some

students

do not complete

the

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education

because

they

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arethey

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deeply involved in

sports

competition

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competitions

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In addition

the

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previous point,

curriculum

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the curriculum

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in the academic modules

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does

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not have

direct

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a direct

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relationship with

sports

For example

sports

will not provide practical experience against certain modules

such

as history, arts and music as they have to be learned by practising,researching and visiting

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apply

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respective ancient history locations.

Therefore

students

will find

difficult

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it difficult

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to balance between academic

education

and

sports

. As discussed in

above

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the above

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paragraphs,

sports

make

students

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apply

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learn better by improving their skills and managing stress.

Hence

,it is clear that

sports

have

strong

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a strong

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positive impact on student's studies and negatives could be managed by striking a balance between

education

and

sports

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Topic Vocabulary:

foster
teamwork
growth mindset
sense of responsibility
manage success and failure
undue pressure
emphasize
winning at all costs
cheating
aggression
physical and emotional burnout
integration
social cohesion
diverse group of peers
encouraging empathy
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joy and love for the game
healthy and enjoyable activity
stressful obligation
means to an end
promote a balanced approach
competition is healthy
sportsmanship
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