Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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. While there are many antique
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where some tourist need to pay
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entry
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fee and others does not. There are more
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markets
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while entering the
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demerits
. Collecting the amount
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entry
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gate of
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visitors
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foreigners avoid
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expensive place.
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the two prominent
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tour
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museums
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because of
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charge
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. The local
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museum
in Bhutan known as Tashi
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was running well
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until
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until
the authority charged the
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fee for
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which resulted
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of
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.
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those consequences can still be avoided by maintaining
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educational
art
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piece where people will seek
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knowledge
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mattering the admission amount.
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will experience huge advantages of maintaining
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standard
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and would
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be able to increase
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of the
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home from budget acquired from
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. The
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reason is that the collected amount can be used for
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as well as purchasing the best additional
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increasing the standards of
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house
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, the best
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piece will
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attract
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attract
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from outside
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rising the budget of
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.
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, the large sum can be used for
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the antique pieces by providing
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structure for
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of pieces and
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hiring strong security. The importance of
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is valued when
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content is heavy and meaningful. In conclusion, promoting
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entry
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charge
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would decrease the number of
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visitors
vistors
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visitors
but there are vast advantages other than that. It helps to promote
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quality of
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with good security which is more important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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